Summary Writing: Question 2

Syllabus R1, R2, R5, W1, W2

Structured 6 marks

For thirty years, the old railway line that once carried freight between Marsh End and the docks has lain unused, its rusted tracks disappearing under brambles and self-seeded birch trees. Last month, the district council proposed clearing the four-mile route and resurfacing it as a combined cycle path and walking trail, connecting the two communities for the first time since the line closed.

Supporters of the plan point to several advantages. Because the old track bed is almost perfectly flat and free of road junctions, it would give cyclists and walkers a safe route away from the busy A-road that currently links the two towns, where three cyclists have been injured in collisions with vehicles in the past two years alone. Local doctors have also welcomed the proposal, noting that a traffic-free route encourages people who would not otherwise exercise to walk or cycle regularly, which could ease pressure on GP appointments over time.

Small business owners in Marsh End are enthusiastic too: a similar trail opened in a neighbouring county three years ago and, according to the local tourism board, brought an estimated forty thousand additional visitors a year to cafes and shops along its length. The council's environmental officer adds that removing car journeys between the towns, even short ones, would cut a small but measurable amount of carbon emissions each year.

The rusting signal box at the old Marsh End halt, built in 1904, would be restored as a rest stop with information boards about the railway's history, though the council has not yet said how much this restoration would cost or when work might begin.

Identify the points the passage gives about the benefits of turning the old railway line into a cycle path. Then, in your own words, write a connected summary of no more than 50 words. (Up to 4 marks for relevant content; up to 2 marks for a concise, well-organised summary in your own words.) [6]

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Creditable content points (up to 4 marks, one per point)

  1. The route is safer than the current road, which has a record of cyclist injuries.
  2. It would encourage exercise, which could reduce pressure on GP/doctor appointments.
  3. It could boost local trade/tourism, based on a comparable trail elsewhere attracting many extra visitors.
  4. It would cut carbon emissions by replacing some short car journeys.

Writing marks (up to 2)

Award marks for a summary that:

  • stays within the 50-word limit
  • uses the student’s own words rather than phrases lifted from the passage
  • joins the points into connected prose (using connectives such as “and,” “which,” “also”) rather than listing them as separate, disconnected sentences

Points that should NOT be credited

  • The thirty-year history of the disused line, or its earlier use for freight, background, not a benefit.
  • The planned restoration of the signal box and information boards, a feature of the plan, not itself a stated benefit of the cycle path.
  • The fact that costs and a start date have not been confirmed. This is an open question, not a benefit.

Model summary (49 words)

“The disused line offers a safer, flatter route than the accident-prone road, and could boost health by encouraging exercise, easing pressure on doctors. A similar trail elsewhere drew many extra visitors to local shops, and replacing short car journeys with walking or cycling would also help cut carbon emissions.”

Final answer

  • A strong response reports all four benefits above in connected, own-words prose within the word limit, and does not mention the railway’s history or the signal box.