Summary Writing: Question 6

Syllabus R1, R2, R5, W1, W2, W3

Structured 5 marks

Bramwell Allotments, a plot of forty gardens on the edge of town, has kept a waiting list for over a decade, but this year that list has grown faster than at any point since records began, according to the site's committee.

Committee members point to a few likely causes. The price of fresh vegetables in local shops has risen sharply over the past two years, and several new applicants have told the committee they hope growing their own food will help stretch a tighter household budget. A number of nurses and delivery drivers who now work from home part of the week have also applied, saying they finally have the free daytime hours needed to keep a plot properly watered and weeded, something a full-time office job made difficult before.

Wider local publicity has played a part too. Several existing plot-holders post regular photographs of their harvests online, and two of these posts were shared widely this spring, prompting a noticeable spike in enquiries the following week. Oakfield Primary School, next door to the site, also runs a lunchtime gardening club with its own small demonstration plot, and several parents who came to watch a class visit went on to apply for full-sized plots of their own.

The site itself dates back to 1946, when land was first set aside for wartime food production, and its committee still meets in the same wooden hut used by the original growers.

Identify the reasons the passage gives for the recent rise in demand for plots at Bramwell Allotments. Then, in your own words, write a connected summary of no more than 45 words. (Up to 3 marks for relevant content; up to 2 marks for a concise, well-organised summary in your own words.) [5]

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Creditable content points (up to 3 marks, one per point)

  1. Rising food prices are encouraging people to grow their own vegetables to save money.
  2. More people working from home part of the week now have time to maintain a plot.
  3. Wider local publicity, social-media posts by existing growers and the primary school’s gardening club, has introduced more people to the idea.

Writing marks (up to 2)

Award marks for a summary that:

  • stays within the 45-word limit
  • uses the student’s own words rather than phrases lifted from the passage
  • joins the three causes into connected prose (using connectives such as “and,” “while,” “also”) rather than listing them as separate, disconnected sentences

Points that should NOT be credited

  • The site’s 1946 origin or its wartime history, background, not a reason for the recent rise in demand.
  • The wooden hut still used by the committee, descriptive detail with no bearing on the rise in demand.
  • The exact number of social-media posts or the season they were shared, should be expressed as a general idea, not copied detail.

Model summary (45 words)

“Rising food prices have encouraged people to grow their own vegetables cheaply, and more people working from home now have time to tend a plot. Wider local publicity, including social media posts and a school gardening club, has also introduced many people to the idea.”

Final answer

  • A strong response reports all three causes above in connected, own-words prose within the word limit, and does not mention the site’s 1946 history or the wooden hut.